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    hi everyone, my name is nok i need some help i gonna apply for visit visa for 6 months but i very worry if my letter is good enough? pls have a look at my letter.

    I met Pemika about one year ago, we became friends through an application on facebook called meet new people, we both had the same intentions when we first started talking, which was just to meet people and make new friends. It started of as any two normal people becoming friends, we started talking 2 - 3 times a week to begin with. The more we talked the more we got to know each other, and started to realise how much a like we really where, as time went on our conversations increased, we then switched from talking on facebook to talking on msn where we could talk more freely with out waiting too long for a reply , with msn we got know each other a lot better. After about four months talking with pemika on a regular basic I wondered what it would be like if we met in person. So we talked about me taking my holiday in Thailand, and for us to meet in person, we both agreed this would be a great idea. After booking my holiday, it would still be six months before I travel, so this gave us plenty of more time to get to know each other better. While waiting for my holiday to Thailand, I dicided to learn to speak some thai, even though Pemika could speak very good English, I thought it would be both respectful and helpful. My trip was planned in November, I would be in Thailand for 3 weeks, and spend the whole of the trip with Pemika, all going well. My time in Thailand was fantastic, I could not off wished for a better holiday, we travelled all around Thailand in the 3 weeks I was there, so we did a lot of travelling, this gave us even more time to get to know each other on a one to one basics. As my time was coming to an end in Thailand it was obvious to me the way I felt about Pemika, she also felt the same. We talked and we decided it would be fantastic if Pemika could come over to England for a visit, to see if the feelings we had on the trip and even before we met would continue, we both believe that they would. We are both at the age now were we both know what we want in life, so this is not a rash decision on our part.




    Now for myself, I have been living in Torquay now for about three years, I am currently working full time for a supermarket, the company is called lidl. I am one of the managers at this supermarket, I have been working here now for just over one year, I currently get paid £22000 pa, which goes up £1000 annually on febuary, with the way the current market is going at the moment this company is ripping the benefits, so my position there is quite strong. With this wage I am quite able to support Pemika while she stays with me here in England, I am currently renting a flat here in Torquay, it is a one bedroom flat, with large bedroom, living room, kitchen, and bathroom. Easily comfortable for two people. While Pemika is here I plan to show her many places here in the UK, as I was fortunate enough to live in many different place here due to the work I was previously doing, which was a fitness coach, I lived in such places as Inverness, Liverpool, Salisbury, I made friends in many places so I would be taking her to visit them, and also towns in the surrounding areas, making sure that Pemika sees as much as the British history as possible, my parents and family are all from Worcestershire, so I will be visiting here also on a regular basis.




    When this six months are over Pemika will return home back to Thailand, there she will go back to work, working in her successful family business. I would like to underline that Pemika has a very good life in Thailand, she has a very loving and supportive family, which I am myself hoping to meet on my next trip to Thailand. I am planning my next trip to Thailand later this year.




    I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for taking the time to read through our application, I hope we have done every thing we can to help you make your mind up with Pemika coming to England for a short visit.


    Any thoughts/suggestions/directions will be welcome. thanks Nok

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    To be blunt, it's too long.

    My suggestion.

    Para 1. Briefly introduce yourself, the applicant (include contact details for you both) and what your relationship is.

    Para 2. A brief history of that relationship.

    Para 3. Reason for visiting the UK at this time.

    Para 4.Expansion or clarification of any points not fully covered on the application form.

    Para 5. List of supporting documents submitted.

    Para 6. Polite conclusion.

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    Hi,
    I opened up your link(out of curiousity )and it shows a little diagram of steven and nok who are 'madly in love'
    Wheres Permika in all of this ?
    I wanted to offer some advice but i have no idea whose who? I,m baffled by the identity crisis.
    Just make sure you clarify whose who when making the application
    Good luck anyways.
    I have consumed a bit of alcohol today so hopefully i won,t feel like a 'donkeys lug' when i wake up tomorrow

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    You would have a much greater chance of success if you applied for something less than six months. One or two to start with maybe.
    If you're offended by any assistance I give, it says far more about you than it does me.

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    I am currently working full time for a supermarket, the company is called lidl. I am one of the managers at this supermarket, I have been working here now for just over one year, I currently get paid £22000 pa, which goes up £1000 annually on febuary, with the way the current market is going at the moment this company is ripping the benefits
    Also wording is important, just on the quote from above, it gives the impression you are flitting through jobs and you need to get the English corect overwise it looks bad on yo, it would sound better as "I am a Manager at Lidl with a salary of £22,000. I am due an annual increase of £1,000 in February. The Company is going from strength to strength and is reaping the rewards of new customers from the current climate... the ripping of benefits is however not of importance, but your other wording and grammar is I'm sorry to say. Be confident, be correct and be sure, good luck

    P.S. The mention of living in lots of different places may also give a subliminal message thet you find it easy to move around and therefore "disappearance" could be subliminally brought to mind. However your idea of palces to see and visit is very good, just make sure you partner is aware of these and also knows about the travel plans, if called to interview the information will be invaluable.

    If you pick up on any mistakes in the above then you could also exepct the Embassy staff to do the same.

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    I must agree with Ian B. Grammar & spelling I would think is important.
    When I read your opening paragraph (on this web site/page) I didn't think that English was your 1st language!

    Once you have read and then re-read your application (for grammar & spelling etc) then submit it.

    The person reading it then may actually believe you hold a working position worth £22k p.a. !

    (PS - sorry to be so blunt)

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    Have to agree its a bit to long winded ,you should look at shortening it down some what,also remember they may want to see evidence of your facebook/msn chats aswell if your giving so much detail to them.Oh and use your spell checker,it all helps in the end.

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    thanks for all suggestions, and sorry for my badly english will learn more,, Pemika (nok)

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    Originally posted by galahad:
    Hi,
    I opened up your link(out of curiousity )and it shows a little diagram of steven and nok who are 'madly in love'
    Wheres Permika in all of this ?
    I wanted to offer some advice but i have no idea whose who? I,m baffled by the identity crisis.
    Just make sure you clarify whose who when making the application
    Good luck anyways.
    I have consumed a bit of alcohol today so hopefully i won,t feel like a 'donkeys lug' when i wake up tomorrow
    thanks for stop by
    take care .Pemika (Nok)

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    I would advise a standard sponsors letter with an added brief relationship history, include reasons for visiting the UK etc.

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